Talk:LaTroy Hawkins

Latest comment: 3 years ago by Kncny11 in topic GA Review

LaTroy Hawkins Fan Club

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I would think it would qualify as a reliable source since it's ESPN, but it is also a blog, so whatever. I won't put it in myself but if someone else wants to, be my guest. At the very least, it's quite interesting. Makes me really like Hawk.

http://espn.go.com/blog/spring-training/post/_/id/1976/latroy-hawkins-and-family

Dozzzzzzzzzing off (talk) 23:29, 15 March 2014 (UTC)Reply

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GA Review

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This review is transcluded from Talk:LaTroy Hawkins/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Kncny11 (talk · contribs) 20:51, 8 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Hey there! I'm going to be taking a look at this article. Any section marked with a   Working tag means that I'm not finished combing through it yet, but feel free to start making changes as soon as you see them! Kncny11 (shoot) 20:51, 8 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Good Article review progress box
Criteria: 1a. prose ( ) 1b. MoS ( ) 2a. ref layout ( ) 2b. cites WP:RS ( ) 2c. no WP:OR ( ) 2d. no WP:CV ( )
3a. broadness ( ) 3b. focus ( ) 4. neutral ( ) 5. stable ( ) 6a. free or tagged images ( ) 6b. pics relevant ( )
Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked   are unassessed

Infobox and lede

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  • Mention the saves against all 30 teams here, as it's kind of a big deal
  • Maybe add a quick sentence at the end about how the Twins hired him after his retirement, just to tie it all together

Amateur career

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Minnesota Twins

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  • Exact day for his 1995 MLB career start?
  • Use fractions for innings, i.e. 1+23.
  • Promoted again to the majors in September,
  • Altogether, Hawkins made six starts in the 1995 season with a link to 1995 MLB season
  • Comma after "in the Twins' rotation as well"
  • Pipe 1996 to 1996 MLB season
  • Pipe 1997 to 1997 MLB season
  • While I'm here, pipe the first instance of "start" to Games started
  • "his 12 losses tied him with 11 other pitchers fro 10th in the American League" tenth what? (I'm assuming tenth most losses?)
  • "In 1998, Hawkins spent an entire season in the Twins' rotation for the first time." → "1998 was the first year that Hawkins spent an entire season in the Twins' rotation."
  • "For the second year in a row in 1999" → "In 1999, for the second year in a row,"
  • Mention what team he blew the May 5 save against

Chicago Cubs

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San Francisco Giants

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  • This looks good!

Baltimore Orioles

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Colorado Rockies

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  • "Against the Boston Red Sox, he pitched the last inning of games 1 and 3," → "There, he pitched the last inning of Games 1 and 3 against the Boston Red Sox,"
  • Mention to whom he gave up the run

New York Yankees

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  • This section also looks good!

Houston Astros

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Milwaukee Brewers

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  • A couple more details on the shoulder injury would be nice (duration, type of injury if you can find it)

Los Angeles Angels

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New York Mets

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  • commas around "with invitation to spring training"
  • "Met's" → "Mets'"
  • Mention the nature of Parnell's injury

Second stint with the Rockies

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Toronto Blue Jays

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Personal life

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  • "Hawkins is married to Anita" is a little awkward. Can probably be combined into one sentence, i.e. "Hawkins and his wife Anita have two children"
  • Would like a little more detail on his job with the Twins. Found some here [2].
  • "young mom" → "young mother"
  • I saw recently that he also helped a TikTok star after a home invasion

References

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  • Make sure all sources are archived using the tool, especially anything with limited or subscription-only access
    • I am not willing to click on all the references to do this. I don't have a subscription to everything, and I try to use ones which only allow occasional views as sparingly as possible, in order to utilize them when they contain information difficult to find anywhere else. MLB's tend to expire, so I have attempted to archive all these. Sanfranciscogiants17 (talk) 03:31, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply
  • Citations to The Denver Post need "|url-access=limited"
  • Citations to The New York Times need "|url-access=limited"
  • There are 37 citations to his Baseball Reference page. While obviously it's the best resource for his annual, well, stats, you can probably find other sources for the trades to cut down on that a little.

General comments

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  • Photos look good
  • Very stable.
  • Earwig score is a little high at 61.3%, but it looks like a mirror site, so I'm unbothered
  • Two big things that I see missing: there is no separate section devoted to his pitching style/scouting reports, and while his consideration in the Baseball Hall of Fame is indirectly referenced in the "See also" section, it has no prose dedicated to it. I found this article from the Chicago Sun-Times where Bob Nightengale explains why he voted for Hawkins.

Final comments and verdict

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What is here is good! Mostly some wikilinks to be added and some minor prose corrections. There are a few sections where I believe that the content could be expanded, particularly with regards to his later years, so I'm going to put the article   On hold until those sections are expanded upon. Feel free to reach out if you have any questions! Kncny11 (shoot) 02:27, 9 March 2021 (UTC)Reply

Especially impressed with how quickly you got that pitching style section up! I made one small typo change, and I think it's good to go! Kncny11 (shoot) 16:59, 10 March 2021 (UTC)Reply