- The following is an archived discussion of the DYK nomination of the article below. Please do not modify this page. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page (such as this nomination's talk page, the article's talk page or Wikipedia talk:Did you know), unless there is consensus to re-open the discussion at this page. No further edits should be made to this page.
The result was: promoted by Cwmhiraeth (talk) 05:10, 7 July 2016 (UTC)
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Gerd Neggo
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Gerd Neggo
- ... that Gerd Neggo (pictured) trained with Rudolf von Laban in Hamburg, Germany; established her dance studio at Tallinn, Estonia, in 1924; and promoted modern dance and mime based on classical ballet?
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Created by Nvvchar (talk). Self-nominated at 01:21, 8 June 2016 (UTC).
- OK. New enough. Long enough. Hook is verified. This needs some more copy edits. I made a few already. I also made minor tweaks to the hook, nothing major. But I have some problems with the article besides the copy edits. For instance, there's nothing on her life in Sweden, where she spent thirty years--I suppose. And if that happens, perhaps we can make a slightly more exciting hook that involves all three countries? Also, in the references, the titles of Estonian documents are translated, but they should have the original titles as well. Please see Template:Cite news for the proper use of the "trans_title" parameter. Finally, the balance between lead and main text is a bit off, which should be easily tweaked. Drmies (talk) 03:12, 10 June 2016 (UTC)
- Drmies Thanks for the review. Three references in Estonian language have been corrected by providing original titles. But my extensive search of web sites and google books has not resulted any additional information to add text at the tags marked in the article.Nvvchar. 11:12, 12 June 2016 (UTC)
- Nvvchar, that "She did her studies" sentence is still quite unclear, as is the correspondence note. Thanks, Drmies (talk) 12:21, 18 June 2016 (UTC)
- Nvvchar, if you can't or won't fix those two relatively minor points, I'm afraid I have to fail this nomination. Drmies (talk) 01:58, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
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- Sorry, but I don't understand that. You don't need more references--the original reference needs to be reread and the text in the article rewritten, for the one; for the other, the correspondence note, see what else is there in the source, or remove the sentence. It's not about sourcing, it's about writing. Drmies (talk) 02:22, 22 June 2016 (UTC)
