Talk:Magnificat (Torri)

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GA Review

This review is transcluded from Talk:Magnificat (Torri)/GA1. The edit link for this section can be used to add comments to the review.

Reviewer: Juliette Han (talk · contribs) 16:23, 7 June 2020 (UTC)

Soon. Juliette Han (talk) 16:23, 7 June 2020 (UTC)

• Tx. Looking forward to the review. --Francis Schonken (talk) 04:38, 14 June 2020 (UTC)
  • @Francis Schonken: ...It appears the reviewer who reserved this review has been blocked indefinitely; in their place, I can review the article if you'd like. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 12:30, 16 June 2020 (UTC)
    • @Vami IV: I'd be very glad if you took it over, see also User talk:Juliette Han#Side effect. --Francis Schonken (talk) 12:37, 16 June 2020 (UTC)

Opening statement

Hello, and come what may from this review, thank you for your contributions to Wikipedia. During the review, I may make copyedits, which I will limit to spelling correction and minor changes to punctuation (removal of double spaces and such). I will only make substantive edits that change the flow and structure of the prose if I previously suggested and it is necessary. The Nominator(s) should understand that I am a grammar pedant, and I will nitpick in the interest of prose quality. For responding to my comments, please use  Done,  Fixed,  Added,  Not done,  Doing..., or  Removed, followed by any comment you'd like to make. I will be crossing out my comments as they are redressed, and only mine. A detailed, section-by-section review will follow. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 04:13, 17 June 2020 (UTC)

Prose

• What do you think about adding a short explanation of who Pietro Torri was? Specifically, how he came to work for the Bavarian Elector and whatever became of him and his works.
  • Re. "how he came to work for the Bavarian Elector" – afaik that is not known. →  Not done --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
  • Re. "whatever became of him" – afaik same employers, and same line of work, although rather dramatic works than Latin church music, until the end of his life: could add some words about that, I suppose in the "History" section. →  Doing... --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC) →  Done --Francis Schonken (talk) 18:40, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
  • Re. "... and his works" – would be something like "largely forgotten for the next few centuries", which to my taste is maybe too much of a platitude for article prose. →  Not done --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
• [...] single continuo part for unspecified instrument(s) [..] Delete the parentheses here ("unspecified instruments").
  •  Done --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
• [...] as tenth and last movement) The tenth and last movement.
  •  Done --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
• [...] Bach P 195: Replace the colon with a semi-colon.
  •  Done --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:22, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

Referencing

References are reliable, and cover the whole article. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 15:33, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

• Citation [11] would do a better job supporting the bullet-points its attached to if it were to proceed them at the colon.
  •  Done --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:31, 24 June 2020 (UTC)
• There isn't a citation for the bullet-point list in "Ninth movement"; I'm assuming it's being held up by [1] and [3].
  •  Done (yes, these two refs were for the entire section, clearer now). --Francis Schonken (talk) 16:31, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

GA progress

Article passes CopyVio scanner. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 15:33, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

Images used on the article are relevant and free use or tagged. –♠Vami_IV†♠ 15:33, 24 June 2020 (UTC)

Good Article review progress box Criteria: 1a. prose () 1b. MoS () 2a. ref layout () 2b. cites WP:RS () 2c. no WP:OR () 2d. no WP:CV () 3a. broadness () 3b. focus () 4. neutral () 5. stable () 6a. free or tagged images () 6b. pics relevant () Note: this represents where the article stands relative to the Good Article criteria. Criteria marked are unassessed

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