Talk:Caesar Hull/GA1

Latest comment: 10 years ago by Zawed in topic GA Review

GA Review

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Reviewer: Zawed (talk · contribs) 09:23, 10 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

I will take this one. Comments will follow later this week. Zawed (talk) 09:23, 10 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Thanks Zawed. Cliftonian (talk) 17:38, 10 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Comments as follows:

Infobox

  • Should his allegiance be to the UK?
  • Well, yes, he was in the Royal Air Force. Normally I would put both the UK and his country of origin, but decided not to this time as he moved to England and joined the RAF directly; it wouldn't seem entirely accurate to me to put Southern Rhodesia, and it also wouldn't seem right to me to put South Africa. Cliftonian (talk) 16:07, 12 February 2014 (UTC)Reply

Early life

  • Don't suppose there is any info regarding his boxing career?

Early war

  • "Hull, Carey and two others together downed another Heinkel on 28 March 1940." Was this a He III?

Norway

  • "...the pilots took off from the sea on 21 May..." Took off from the sea? I know what you are trying say but maybe rephrase? "...took off on 21 May while at sea..."?
  • "Heinkel He 111 " a little inconsistent in presentation as you have referred to them simply as He III (apart from first usage) in previous section. Later on it becomes Heinkel.
  • "...during 70 combats." This doesn't feel right; "during 70 combat missions."?
  • Feltwebel, Oberleutnant:link the ranks? And isn't it Feldwebel?
  • "...and forced to crash near the Bodø airfield.": Is this airfield the same as the one mentioned in the 2nd para of this section? If so, the link should be moved.

Battle of Britain; death

  • I think the rank in the quote box should be recited in full.

Other stuff

  • Image tags look appropriate
  • Duplicate link in lead: Distinguished Flying Cross (first usage is as post-nominal)
  • No dab links
  • Checklinks tool shows links working OK

This article covers its subject reasonably broadly and is well referenced with reliable sources. The above comments are really just nitpicks. Zawed (talk) 10:14, 12 February 2014 (UTC)Reply